Pinot- I read this verse second by mistake... and fucking loved it. I was expecting my kind of twist, but quickly realized this is Pinot's shit lol. I loved that fucked up ending and I was on edge the whole time. Your rhyming didn't come off as forced and though some of the usage was shaky, this was an overall solid piece. I enjoyed this and would probably read this again after the tournament just to remind myself of the 'oh shit' factor I got from it upon finishing. Good job.
Pie- My guess is this is either Halloween-themed, or the protagonist daydreams to escape home-mom misery. I haven't truly decided, but I appreciate this passage simply for the rarity of the concept IMO. I haven't read much from a mom's perspective and it's pretty cool to see someone doing that with decent anecdotal flare. This was interesting, especially because many people have those family members imitate pop culture material to entertain friends(i.e. me) and that's cool. The rhyming was pretty good and the story kind of didn't have a real flow, due to the nature of it. It just kind of 'was'. As I said, I appreciate it and hope to read more of you.
I believe both competitors wrote decent pieces and matched well against each other. I do believe, however, that one competitor utilized the art of storytelling in a more dynamic and exciting light. MVGT Pinot.
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