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Old 01-21-2016, 05:25 PM   #9
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Pinot, so far, this is the best verse one read this week. It has all the elements of a great story with a nice character development to grow found of, other characters to help build the story and a great dramatic effect to pull the reader closer. Not to mention the flow was nice and made it go smoothly. The content of voodoo and you actually performing since kind of magic thing. I looked it from start to finish pretty much.

Soul, this verse was nice, but with the topic of finding of soul and your name being Solstice, I thought you would have a more direct approach to this topic. The flow was nice for most of it and it covered to the topic, but it was very broad and vague. I liked it, but this needed some details in the content or even some imagery for me as the reader to get more from the narration. This verse was nice nevertheless


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