Cimmerian, The flow of your piece was quite good, impressive transitions.
since the opening of the first few lines I was enjoying the direction you were going
I feel like the elegant path/crashed idea seemed ok but kind of off for me.
otherwise this was a pretty good entry, it could have used some more lines but nice work
Witty, I thought your piece was pretty well written as well, I didn't like that opening though
but from the start of the actual verse I felt that the beginning was dope.
the way you work the whole flow in & just keep it up is worth the whole read.
its fun reading your work when you actually have the time to sit down and do it.
I really enjoyed that Sistine Chapel line...nice work brah....
v/This was kind of tough to come to a definite decision due to both writers interpretation
I feel like both came with decent concepts but the one that kept me motivated to finish & read again was Cimmerian.
I really enjoyed Wittys piece due to the way he sculpted his rhyming to stay so smooth.
I felt the opening and the follow up after the end of the verse was quite odd. But not as impressive as the main structure.
Nice battle fellas. v/Cimmerian
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