Argh, this was a bit brief to get into the content, but I think it's about the random scenes of a dreamscape. The transition from being at a monitor to pieces of paper on the floor and going to 711 were really rough.. The ending kind of made the rest make more sense, but still those transitions were really rough in the flow of this character development.
MrJ, very gripping tale of a downward spiral and you put enough detail to develop the character what led them to a fate of sleeping on the bed of a truck. The flow was decent and kept it moving nicely. I looked this also because I can relate to this situation.
Vote MrJ
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