Netcees - View Single Post - Pinot Grij vs. Soulstice

Argh · 01-21-2016, 05:24 AM

Pinot Grij
You're probably not familiar with the name, but your style is eerily similar to Cormier's (Project Rhyme veteran and topical mainstay). With both of you, the rhyming is straightforward, the narratives are linear and there's always an element of humor. Anyway, I didn't watch the video you included with the verse. In my mind, a verse should be able to stand on its own without any additional supporting context. The good news is, your piece certainly did. It was a breeze to read and the creativity was evident.

Soulstice
I've always enjoyed your work. The concept of your piece was interesting and the verse touched on origins and the power of memory. I liked the story/book analogy you used as a vehicle to construct your narrative. The content was a bit too esoteric for my personal taste, and I think the verse could have benefited from more grounding to knit the various elements together.

Vote
Both pieces took a completely different approach to the topic. Overall, I think Pinot had a stronger showing and the more complete verse.

VOTE=Pinot Grij

01-21-2016, 05:24 AM	#4
Argh Member Join Date: Dec 2015 Posts: 34 Rep Power: 3436004	Pinot Grij You're probably not familiar with the name, but your style is eerily similar to Cormier's (Project Rhyme veteran and topical mainstay). With both of you, the rhyming is straightforward, the narratives are linear and there's always an element of humor. Anyway, I didn't watch the video you included with the verse. In my mind, a verse should be able to stand on its own without any additional supporting context. The good news is, your piece certainly did. It was a breeze to read and the creativity was evident. Soulstice I've always enjoyed your work. The concept of your piece was interesting and the verse touched on origins and the power of memory. I liked the story/book analogy you used as a vehicle to construct your narrative. The content was a bit too esoteric for my personal taste, and I think the verse could have benefited from more grounding to knit the various elements together. Vote Both pieces took a completely different approach to the topic. Overall, I think Pinot had a stronger showing and the more complete verse. VOTE=Pinot Grij Last edited by Argh; 01-21-2016 at 05:52 AM.