[Frank]

Pinot Grij

Beginning Stanza remains true to your satirical knee slap comedy shtick style. You open up with an embedded video which I refused to click on. This is a topical battle with an assigned topic, any extra visual aid should be frowned upon at this stage of the game. You also applied this tactic in the first round, by including a completely separate visual, in addition to the image provided for you, which could've been seen as an disadvantage to your opponent, which could've warranted a disqualification. So, right off the bat I negated you and deducted points from you subconsciously from a strictly creative stand point. Upon reading the first passage, I notice the usage of "out" in the first 3 lines, twice. The word "out" was not flipped and didn't come across with any duality, simply a cop out, a rookie word placement, or lack of vocabulary, whatever the case may be, it set the tone early on as not being up to par with the more advanced writing around you this tournament has produced thus far. The safe, almost amateurish rhyming continues without any real technical support. This newbie like rhyme scheme actually made your Jock character more believable and authentic. Obviously you were writing from your meathead perspective. The next stanza unfolds, and your comedic timing picks up, putting your Micky Avalon demeanor on full display. However corny it may be, those first couple lines of your second stanza personify your light hearted, happy go lucky style. You are one of the funnest characters on Netcee, writing wise. Clown like in your presentation. Your verses streak across the lawn with a senior frat boys last day of school, Ferris Bueler type of writing. Again though, this second stanza is littered with mis calculations. "And if you trust remy but any then I can get it back" Not sure whether this is a typo or a brain fart. Another example of poor penmanship is" Vincent drink it/time for thinking" Lots of numbskull lines. "Face FELL flat, Base BALL bat" Now viewers may consider this as nitpicking, but I feel it is my obligation to point out these crucial blunders - out of respect for the craft. Your voodoo chant in capital letters was atrocious and almost down right racist. That little section just felt like malarkey to me. Finally, you bring it to a close with what I ultimately feel is a decent summary of your piece. In closing, this was a very scatter brained verse that suffered multiple concussions and head trauma from the opening quarter couplet. While the verse took a number of bone shattering hits, Your QB, which appeared to me as second string, or possibly third or fourth string even - finished the game in a triumphant like manner.

Soulstice

Compact in your poignancy. A dense yet brief verse that touched on strangers and your childhood and other remnants of soul searching. From a purely technical standpoint, the rhyming itself is leaps and bounds over Pinot Grijs. Your 3 bar, cross over rhyme scheme is a Soulstice trademark. I thought this verse was short lived, though - explosive, like the smoke trailing off fireworks. It lingers, but it is fading profoundly from my memory as I write this. I favored the content in this over your opponents. It was much more fantastic and whimsical. 8-14 more lines would've solidified this piece and taken it to another level.

People were anticipating this duel and it caught a few BOTW nods from a gang of prestigious writers. The contrast in styles is a thing of beauty. Pinot Grij is a prankster and Soulstice is a wizard.

After deliberating, I am unbiasedly giving the edge to Pinot Grij here.

Decent effort, Thanks for the read.