MMM.. The flow started off a little slow, but you pickd it up and by the middle it was flowing nicely with a good structure to the story and not bad on the character development, but the story could of used some imagery and exciting details of the the torture, her pain and other elements that you barely touched on within the details.
Pent.. Flow was on point throughout and you ran with a deep concept that came together with you ending. I was feeling that. Cage of behavior has imprisoned most of us if not all of us at one point in our life so its also very relatable. Your ending was what had me the most.
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