this vote is prolly overkill but since it's still open, here:
mvgt J, cuz it was more on topic, and stuff.
That being said J, this is not up to the standard I hold you to..
First couplet was dope though..
Rotting away, I look at the body as it tosses in rain..
sometimes it makes me nauseous and hate the toxins that wait
SO "O.M." OF YOU. RIGHT BAGS? LOLZ
after that it looked pretty "keyed".
I send streaks to the same place the sewage floats
tell my closest that You need to see this shitty portrait yo
That's a shitty couplet i.m.o.
Keyed or not though, that second stanza flowed pretty sweet, and I like most of it phonetically, even though there are some concepts which seem to come out of nowhere.. where even tho things are subjective you can tell it's pretty much unrelated.. Like Innovatives first round but not quite that extreme.
You take this though for hitting the topic "enough" and writing perdy good.
Bagsy,
Hilarious man..
Lotta great moments in this gem of the verse... it's just in the wrong tournament I guess... maybe the picture somehow reminded you of punches towards your round 1 opponent or the moderator.
Were probly 2-3 parts that "deaded me" but my fav was:
Lol let a bimbo even suggest it to me an she flyin out a window
She too fly? Send er down a flight of stairs
On a one way ticket to a guy that cares
ncie rhymes. loses cuz... well, u know why
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