B.E - Cool verse, it was a nice and consistently well written piece, it wasn't the most exciting story and did lull in to dullness a few times, maybe it was just the concept that I didn't feel was particularly great, but the writing was very good, from a technical standpoint I really have no complaints. You wrote well, told a clear story and had some very interesting word choices. Good stuff.
2tripple0 - I have no idea what this piece is about, therefore I can not leave feedback. It just seems like random words thrown together.
Vote - B.E.
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Explicit and poisonous violent crime.
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