Witty- this verse is almost identical to that one about reading books, aside from the beginning and end flip. That flip is what made this one stand out because it was super similar otherwise. I think given what I've read from you, you either played it safe or were just lazy. The odd thing about it was that this piece was still dope. The rhyming jumped around a litlle more than usual, but othrr than that it was a solid read. Good job.
Pharoah- I think your angle was decent, but if you were to squeeze more content out of it your result would have yielded better results. However, your format was terrible imo.I'm not sure if you were imitating something or what, but reading the choppy structure was not enjoyable. This could have been better, but it came off really rushed and not fleshed out enough. I think you could have done more, but thanks for posting anyway.
In my mind this wasn't an even match as far as overall performance, but the angles could have been more competitive with the right development. As a result MVGT Witty. Thanks for showing guys.
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