Interesting topic.
I felt like Pharoahs' verse, approached the topic better. That's kind of the direction I would've gone in. I felt like most of the verse was written simply, but, what made it dope was how real it is. I liked it a lot for that reason. Cool stuff bruh.
Witty's verse on the other hand, was simply better. The rhyming was super smooth. I got through half your verse before I scrolled up to see what the topic was, and I felt it didn't really relate to that. While reading it, I thought it was about time because .. what else would be able to 'view' all those things. You kind of threw it all together at the end to 'make it fit', but I felt like that was a lazy way to write the verse. It was a pretty good verse though.
This can go either way, in my eyes. Pharoahs' verse was more on topic, but I felt like Witty's verse was written better, although it wasn't entirely focused on the topic. *shrugs* Good read though, both of ya'.
vWitty
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