Bags - I was dying from this - but unfortunately it doesn't even begin to attempt to be a topical verse. Usually, I'm all for topic bending, but this effort basically undermines the entire purpose of the tournament and for that reason I can't reasonably vote for your verse to win. Hilarious, though.
Mr. J - I don't get how a body tosses in rain. I don't get how toxins wait. Using "yo" as your primary rhyme in a topical is kinda weak. You're drinking cappuccino, eating a burrito and smoking weed all at the same time. "the resemblance is striking" - resemblance to what? The color scheme portion seems pretty rushed in at the last second and the lines don't develop well together. I rush to finish a piece without the colorful....wack demeanor. That sums up this verse. Honestly, I hate that Bags forced me to vote for this. This is a complete rush job and you offer the reader really nothing to think about or savor or enjoy. I hope you show more effort next round. This was bad.
Vote -- Mr. J
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