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Old 12-03-2015, 03:47 AM   #4
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This had a real old skool "AIM Cypher" freestyles keystyled up in the reply box feel to it that I liked!

I also enjoyed the whole kinda "broken-down bar" flow to it, not sure if everyone will catch it while reading it in text but the two of you place more emphasis on flow than a lot of text heads do, and I for one dig that.

Quote:
fuck a surgical face lift
I'll completely pulverise yours and leave you permanently faceless
there's no turnin' the tables on me
I run circles 'round squares
you just wish we were reversed in our places
Loved the permanently faceless line in particular from Exis. Dope.

Vividlyvague went offffffffff with that whole interstellar scheme, I thought that was ill!

I'd have probably used "If it's any constellation" instead of consolation as a malopropism, but I saw you used constellation anyway a little later on. No real reason for it, it just would have amused myself in the middle of the scheme to do that. Lol.

Quote:
Think you can fare a wave like you hailing cabs?
That one stood out too.


Overall you two meshed real nicely, similar styles and whatnot in execution. Very enjoyable read and somewhat of a nostalgic feel to it from my early first days of text.

Keep those pens moving!
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