Hmm. Mr. J, solid rhyming on this piece. Although, I'm not a big fan of the ending. I just, I don't know, I kind of expected this to go a different route & it didn't, which unfortunately meant I was let down on how it ended. :/ Flow was real smooth though. Probably the best 'written' piece as far as rhyming goes, that I've read from you.
Asylum, I don't remember reading too many verses from you. From what I remember, besides last weeks verse, I can't really recall reading much stuff from you. Last weeks verse was real iffy compared to this weeks. I really enjoyed this weeks. I really liked the story you told. You managed to put a whole story together, not have it feel drawn out, and wrapped it up very nicely. Good work. I feel like you could work on your rhyming, because you were definitely out-rhymed against Mr. J, but you did have the better verse this time around, in my eyes. Unexpected but;
vasylum
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