Zee Dee - The font is trademark but man it's like a blurr to look at. I just wanted to point that out
Ok I've stopped reading 2/3 of the way to make this observation. You ran off names at a manageable rate - they weren't overwhelmingly introductory - which can be burdensome for the casual reader. Instead - they were a tight nit family where I had an idea of who they were; each and every one of them. This is accredited to your choice of names, which I feel were all chosen out of reason - rather than rhyme. The Rose, the Gene, the Jewel, The Mic - but why Tammy?
A lesbian lineup of art
Wow - you captured that moment with an all seeing eye. That transition was one of the best lines all season. Powerful observing way of summing up that whole couplet - line belonged
the detail is dope - elephant eye breasts and pudding pop pussy holes - ha
come filled love shack
6 seconds - in reference to the sin of infidelity?
Overall
This verse had a battle rap of a flow with a topical ninja point of view. Very well written and raw too. The end could of been more dramatic cause it kind of peers off the cliff - instead of backflipping - somebody has to nudge it though. This is the top 10 reads this season for me though - entertaining all around. Flow was gutter but smooth, and the content was pretty fresh. Nice 1
Vulgar
This was like a grainy tape I watched one time from the black market - it was filmed with low budget camera lense; but the images it took were almost priceless. This was a true rant. Started out as a story but In Vulgar fashion it quickly went astray into the twilight zone of Rant. You use a lot of elite mechanisms within your writing but they do not always transpire in a orderly fashion. You create gumbos of different aromas - a sweet hint there - salty hint there - know what I'm saying? You need to wiff it back into your face every once in a while with the old hand to make sure its afugehtaboutit! Know what I'm saying? But I can say this - your the pablo picasso of the modern topical world.
The vote
Two different agendas and inspiration levels went into battle this week. I would like to think Vulgar slouched but his flow was much crisper this week; not cohesive; but it was cool. Chin up girl/pin up girl - lol that's old school 50 shit. Dope freestyle verse with serious potential - ZeeDee came with some wild details - story line - the whole 9.
Vote goes to Zeedee
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