cool battle.
zeedee- dope story. I followed it all the way through and I despise long verses. but ya I read this in its entirety which says a lot. went with the topic well. structure wise, it was strong in the beginning but tailed off a bit towards the end. the flow was ok not great in the second half. but it had a good story arc and I like how the picture was showing the ending of the verse. cool effect
vulgar- seemed rushed. you have a way with words that's very unique. and some really cool lines in there. mechanically it was the superior piece. told more of an overview instead of a story line, which is ok, shit its what I do most the time, but I feel like you didn't really punch it home hard. the ending lacked a little for me.
overall, two good verses that I enjoyed reading. but zeedees kept my interest a tad more and I thought went with the topic better. so im gonna vote
vote-zd
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