[ZeeDee]

Objective, this was a great display of creativity and the intro set it off nicely... its so far the best intro I've read and I'm including my own intro in that calculation..

He's in a polygamist relationship with himself , the time stops at liquor hours
And his personality's standing under the miseltoe for whistleblowers...

I didn't even look up to remember that... it stuck in my head that much. The story continues to be interesting, but not as creative as the intro.... multiple personalities fightig each other is a pretty old concept to explore... but I do like what u did with it... would of liked more on the character build like what kinds of things does the main and other personality do that would be intersting.. I still liked it tho

Mic, narration was great and the continual flow was cool too. Your metaphorical use of the monster was nicely done as well and intelligent, which I appreciate. Humanity and the way we change the orld is the monster of ur story and you made that clear with all examples of monsoons and the way humanity as turned this planet into a huge waste site where viruses are created just from a lack of understanding all the chemicals we create.. I like ur take on this and it was very well worded.. its also an old concept to write about tho....

Vote Objective... his story stuck in head more than the metaphorical monster.. it was his creativity that won me over in the long run... very had choice... had to read em both a few times