[Mr. J]

Adonis, I thought that opening line was written pretty smoothly
I like shit like that its like saying peter piper picked a peck of pickled peppers
but what really stood out to me was the whole flow of your piece
the transitioning is nice, the overall topic was cool for the topic at hand
you two seem evenly matched as far as styles go though. this seemed straightforward to me
nice work.

Vulgar, its nice to see you take a break from the whole poetry sensation going on lately
your verse seems more loosely based on the topic but not to the point you dont understand what you are saying.
at first the opener felt kind of weird but then I felt like you were complimenting Adonis verse as well


v/I feel like both verses were great they reflected their opponents in style & line length
which makes this an easy read to say the least, of course Vulgar came with a more complicated approach, more metaphorical.
Adonis came more mechanical and came with a pretty cool flow.....well so did Vulgar
either way I feel like this battle all comes down to entertainment value.
Adonis shined and its been awhile since I read anything from him, as for Vulgar his approach is reminiscent of his older verses
really enjoyable reading both works.
next time both of you can come catch this L from me though....




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Vulgar...for having the more entertaining verse