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Old 11-21-2015, 10:41 AM   #9
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Rhyme Asylum – this was dragged out a little, theres filler in places where things could have been explained better imo. The story could have been condensed a little better tbh. On second read, im still unsure about what im reading, it seems cool, it seems bad ass and full of warfare scenario(s). The imagery is dope but what exactly has gone on. Feels like the first time I watched the final LOST episode (that was amazing looking back btw).


Copy – dope read man, I freaking love your style. Theres a select few i'd choose to collab with on this site, if I was ever bestowed with the honour lol and your one of them. The analogy of simply filling up on petrol/ fighting for privileges/ working against the system/on war is brill and funny. It looks simple and short but its anything but, theres a lot to be admired in your piece.
Very enjoyable read

have no fear Asylum it seems you've won this one mate but I have to give this to Pat based on a more satisfying read overall.


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