timeless- I haven't really read you since our last season together, but damn your language has progressed sharply.I believe this was a story of an accidental lobotomy, due to the context of the ending, but bI could obviously be wrong. Youlanguage and decent pacing were the strengths here, as your story wasn't particularly exciting as much as engaging. Good job overall though.
rakontour- i read this twice and couldn't decipher the tidbits. I assumed a few things. THis could be an alternate dialog from V for Vendetta, a lesbian crush(hiding behind a mask, and other metaphors), or just a lovestruck scared guy. I'm not sure, but at any rarte, this was good writing. The rhyming had potential to be complex, but didn't seem like a true focus of this piece, which is fine, since it flowed well regardless. Overall, cool piece. Just not sure where this leaves me at the end.
Both these guys know what they're doing and they both wrote very comfortably,displaying that either this is their wheelhouse, or they're just that badass. For me, my overall impression came down to final feel, and accessibility as far as making the content vivid, but still serving the purpose of their piece. I think I felt one over the other here. MVGT timeless
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