asylum- holy shit bro. damn. I likle this a fucking lot. The start of the show was the flow (lol). Syllabic peppering was impressive through most of the piece, but you kind of abandoned it during the action as if you were to occupied with the bullets. You then picked it up again at the very end, which was almost a complete save, but this shit was cool regardless. I think there was also some confusion with the characters, but other than that, yhou came through on this work pretty nicely. Good Job bro.
CopyPat- I enjoyed this thoroughly as well. This came off as a vent piece, but it held a lot of relatable relevence with how the global economy works with us working folk. It sucks, buty your delivery and message didn't, as it caused a little self evaluation on why the fuck don't we do etter in our lives to get better? Anyway, I think your only achilles quality is the fact that you're a creature of habit just like me. It can come off as redundant, especially since the cadance is always incredibly constant and doesn't necesarily spark any excitement while reading. Dope verse though.
I liked both verse for very different reasons, as both have gone to different angles and styles with this entry. MVGT asylum for the overall more enjoyable and well-executed verse.
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