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Old 11-20-2015, 11:29 PM   #9
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Yes, I don't really see any direct connection of any of the verses to any of the competitor's verses.

Simply put,

MMLP: The verse itself had more of an impactful ending, as a whole it wasn't as organically fluid as YDK's. The story and the content was more creative than his though. But, the actual composite of words at times felt disjointed and not as strong as phrasing as YDK.

YDK: Had a grandiose feeling to the verse, didn't see the connection to the topic. Became more and more heartfelt, as it read, but while it began as a powerful rendition it became more punitive in scope and ended kind of losing steam at the end.

I have to give this one to MMLP for a more entertaining piece this time around. Sorry YDK.
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