Two very different verses, I guess.
Copy, this feels like you just got your toes wet & didn't really go to deep into it. Felt like this could've been so much more, but it wasn't. I liked how you tied in the concepts of gas / oil / war and shit, but like I said, you could've wrote a little more about that or done something to give the verse a little more uhmphh.
Asylum, the story was cool. Probably the best part. To be honest, that's probably what saved you here. Wasn't a fan of the rhyming, felt like some lines got longer & longer for no apparent reason. The only reason you're getting my vote is because I could go along with the story & picture most of it playing out in my head. If Copy would have expanded on his verse, he would've got this easy, but he didn't, so..
vasylum
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