Cool shit guys. Haven't read a battle in a while.
Timeless: The verse read really smoothly to me. The beginning first lines flowed perfectly for me. Great way to start a verse. I was confused the first time I read the verse, but after reading it a second time, at a slower pace, I was able to connect the dots. Dots worth connecting, if you ask me.
Rak: Okay so, the short lines made the read pretty quick, but it just didn't flow as well to me. Also, I wasn't really intrigued by what you wrote. I feel like you had a better verse as far as relating to the topic, but it wasn't the better verse. It was a good verse, I just enjoyed Timeless more this time around.
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