wOwZeR....Great fuckin battle.
ZeeDee: Damn. I kinda felt the dude's anger the whole time in this piece, but for some reason I could only picture Mitt Romney as the main character of this lol. But all in all you had a great rhyme scheme here but the strongest point of your piece was that I could feel the emotions of the characters. Pretty strong stuff here and I enjoyed it. Props.
Vulgar: When I read this piece I was reminded again of how perfect you word shit. Seriously. It's very unique and pretty poetic. So in this piece you had all of the great wording and you maintained a very good flow, but as someone else said before it seemed like this lacked direction. It was a great piece no doubt but it feels like it was missing something. What that something is idk lol. But all in all great verse Vulgar.
So I gotta vote for ZeeDee. Great battle.
|