j, good job creating something in that few lines. cool enigmatic buildup and then revealing this unknown at the end, pretty effective at this length so well done. mechanics sound as well.
timeless, a decent segment of writing, but it kinda felt just like that. mechanics weren't bad at all but the progression of the content just felt like it would have been better suited for a longer verse.
vote to the more complete verse
+1 Mr. J
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