Mmlp, seen a lot better from you when it comes to your concept selection. Your ending s are usually pretty decent but i feel u didn't capitalize on that this week. Your flow and multi usage keep getting better which is noteworthy. If there were a most improved award youd def get my vote. Overall not bad just wish you polished it up more.
Rak, don't recall reading a verse from you even tho i prolly did. I can see you're one of those vocab whores. Some people taking that as "ooooo shiny" instead of rust, however yours seemed just right, not overdone. Flow was off in more places than I'd like. Imagery was dope. My only qualm would have to be how boring it was tbh. Was waiting for something to happen aside from a slick ending but hey that's just my taste.
V. Rak
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