Law – I tried the italics, speech thing in my champ match so I cant judge but I will lol. It’s hard to pull off, to make it coherent and make it tie together smoothly. I usually don’t prefer ‘speech’ or lengthy quoting in ‘storytelling’ pieces. It didn’t live up to a champ match verse imo. Going lazy with the muftis was my main beef with the whole thing tbh, very evident it was rushed. Shame really becuz every1 gets into this position on merit and it gets thrown away almost if slip up once.
Take it from MMLP, the RECOVERY starts here. I mean look at me Im NOT AFRAID to…. ahahahahaha I could do this all day!
Keep the pen moving
Nigma – this was a good read, mechanically almost flawless, lots of internal rhyming which I love and makes me wanna go back to re-read and make sure I pick up everything. I was wondering where it was going, but it ties up nicely. I was satisfied by the ending. All in all, a championship match verse. Kudos!
v/Nigma
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