CopyPat – this piece has great flow, first of all. Yup, I felt it. Know all about that. Sick ass piece man. Your brevity worked for you. You got away with just spitting some truth that fit the topic, I love it when that happens. Last line was dope, really tied in the topic. Worked well. These bars hit deep for me.
Getting crazy fucked just to deal with our lives
The real world is harsh but we don’t see with our eyes
We just leave it inside, ignoring the truth
Fleeing our minds while pouring a few
That was really good, I fucking enjoyed it. This next turn of phrase was especially enjoyable as well.
But you chose it so fuck it. A hose in the bucket
Overflowing abundance of ignorant bliss
Just the way you rhymed and it flowed, marks of a wordsmith. Can’t really put it any other way, you’re obviously fucking good. I mean, you could’ve taken this farther but you kept it brief. It works for you. Nice verse, sir.
Frank – I couldn’t believe what I was reading for a while. Yes. Almost every line ends with mind. But it fucking worked bro. How the fuck did you make this work? So sick. This is a piece for an author, some of that “how the fuck did Frank pull that off?” but you did. Well.
This is probably my favorite line, seriously. Idk why. I fucking ate this shit up..
Washing my hair... shampooing my mind.
idk what canoodling is but ima give that one a pass. Then this..
Lying in a red pool in my mind, my mind schmoozed, the K9 woof in my mind
I go on long runs and listen to Nike windbreakers swoosh in my mind
at this point i'm close to busting up. idk why. just some sense of comedy you instill by being so ridiculous really worked for you. But this one came in second for favorite line..
Skewing your mind, confusing your mind, renewing your mind until you're indisputedly mine
Liked how that sounded. Fresh out the drycleaners. Nice verse bro. I really enjoyed reading this unconventional, original, fresh ass shit. A bit long in the tooth but it had the bite to back it up.
/v Frank, he simply came with more, it was entertaining as fuck, a real creative piece that looks like it took some work. Honestly, if I were to weigh it pound for pound, copypat would have been my first choice. But Frank’s piece simply is the better of the two.. especially if I don’t take line count into consideration. or time constraints.
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