Pat - for the short piece it was, it was smoothly done. Quality not quantity, love the mechanics involved. Flow and topic was executed smoothly. You staying with the story whilst flowing the way u did, thats hard as fuck, Props! in reality I can relate ALOT to what your talking about, it touched home!
Jes - first thing i look for is the technicality of the piece (flow/ rhyme wise) and then understand what is being portrayed. U only nailed one of those imo, the rhyming was solid (except "hate when im talking") and but i lost track with what was happening, where it was leading, the story doesnt blend together has good as copypat's and thats the area his stood out more
Solid match up, good reading and nice to see line matching!
v/ Pat
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