Godcomplex - Really amazing piece man. Really great approach and story. The progression and transitions were written very well. Flowed well except for a bar or two that put a hiccup in it, nice word placement and a perfect complexity to the writing. High above simplistic but at a point where it isn't overwhelming either. I really have to say this had accurate and great references towards the muslim religion. Found myself learning a thing or two as well by looking up some stuff after I read your verse. Real great work this week. One of the better, if not best (most complete) verse i have read this week so far.
Mr. J - Cool little verse. Had great flow and rhyme scheme. It was short and compact but did well with the topic at hand. However, I couldn't help to feel that it ended so quickly and I felt like there was just something missing there. Gotta say I really liked this bar though,
"The door creaks open & a smile shines among the darkness
a sudden paralysis overpowers the body...The artist"
^ Example of using some simplicity to really paint the perfect picture. Outstanding use of imagery right there.
MVGT: Godcomplex - As I already said I felt this was one of if not the best verse I have read this week so far regarding the battles. So going into it after I read his verse it was going to be hard to beat from the get go. From what Mr. J had written I thought he did a damn good job, however, it just fell short and left myself as a reader feeling like something else needed to be in there to make it go.
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