Exis – straight battle verse, directed at your opponent? Okay.
when my boo is gettin' sprayed in the face
while she is placed on her knees
in a non graceful like way as she done takes it with ease
I'll blitz the administration
That’s an interesting picture you’ve portrayed, indeed. Where exactly is Australasia? Bro, your syllable counts are all over the place. But the topic allowed for this kind of drop. Probably might want to refrain from directly addressing your opponent as “the wackest emcee,” directly, in the future here.. but in all reality this was a decent drop that rhymed ok and hit the mark you were going for. I felt that bit on spitting in the face of politicians. I’m not sure what a bitch swipe is but I did like the phrase immaculate speed. You are indeed morbid and strange. Indeed, the world will probably be brutal until it stops spinning. I agree with you there.
2k – Here you are again, acknowledging the fact you are writing a piece with direct language. Idk. Not really a fan of that approach bud. I relate to this line immensely,
ive got to figure out what im looking for inside this verse
and everyone welcome around here like it was gods church
indeed, everyone is welcome here. And this piece was pretty chill for what you were going for. Perhaps you should not call collect in the future? That is a very selfish approach to communication. You are “candid” indeed, sir. And yes, companies do take advantage of cell phone addiction. I felt that part. Also liked the line about , “I got all the answers like price is right.” I like that show. It’s very enjoyable, but I miss Bob Barker. Did you know he makes prison toothbrushes and bed mats? Who knew. Anyways, I’m not sure if you know how to rhyme 100%. You should look up the term “assonance” and “rhyme,” and perhaps watch some English television programming with subtitles on in your own language, so you can get a feel for what each word actually sounds like compared to how it is written. I like reading your stuff because you’re always progressing. never give up.
/v exis had the more solid piece, it rhymed a lot better. both pieces took a similar approach but Exis was the more refined of the two. Good battle tho, 2k could have taken this if he had rhymed a little more and continued off the themes he brought forth in the beginning. Thanks to you both!
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