VV: I liked this, it was very eclectic, in the sense, of how you weaved various sensory reflections to depict a monograph that was rooted in a setting of hopelessness. Like I said to you before, I think you have a knack for detailed writing, however, you do suffer from the lack of lackluster advanced rhymes to really make the verse stronger, you have some but nothing that shows your skill in rhyming. But, again your focus seems to be delivering the most lush scenery that one can envision and or deliver. And you do so, quite well.
Flo: You repeated some of the same words in a repetitious and therefore dull manner in a couple of lines. Also the basic spelling issues really should not be there, they are a hindrance that are easily avoided if you took a few minutes to correct. But, you've mentioned your insane work hours, so I'll be a little more lenient in my final decision making. As for the rest of your verse, it had much emotional flare that you carried well. The topic itself was much more risky than your opponent. And you pulled it off exceptionally well, well done, I like verses that test the waters by speaking on matters that are socially taboo, However, like I said, the execution was unfortunately not as refined as could have been.
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