VV - From the get go I thought you set the tone well, your word usage was nice with it....you stayed on topic & had some good descriptive imagery...solid verse all 'round.
Flo - Unfortunately your 'flow' is a hindrance while readin'...it's not woeful but yeah it's choppy in places, You also had some nice imagery & content as a whole is pretty cool...did feel @ times you lost your way tho, felt a little disconnected from the story.
Vote - VV simply for the fact he had a better, more enjoyable verse.
Stay uppity.
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