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Old 11-05-2015, 10:36 PM   #11
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timeless- that last stanza tho. "unborn fetus" was the conclusion of normality lol. that shit got twisted fast. I liked this drop and liked your pacing in waiting to expose the tail/tell. I think was a cool take on the topic and you rhymed fundamentally and consistently with maybe one or two syllables off here and there. overall solid work. good job bro.

mmlp- the reveal was nice. that single element elevated this piece to another level. your rhyming was solid as per your trademark, and the story was steady and concise. I liked that you kept it short because it began to droll a little right before you reignited the piece with the idea that kept it together. way to go.

both guys had a sort of surprise at the end, and both rhymed fairly well with solid storytelling mechanics and structure. This time around it comes down to who made the bigger overall impact. The small scale nature of the beginning made the tell more of a highlight and as a result MVGT MMLP for the slightly cooler piece.
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