sy, cool little passage of thought. i cant recall any sections i dislike but fondly remember this bar
"Their satellite impacted right next to the sacrificial pit, where the Goddesses weep,
awakening knowledge from the deepest confines of astrology’s reach"
that was sick. last quarter of the verse was my favorite and i really enjoyed the intelligence of your closing line.
Law, interesting opener. it had me thinking the whole thing was about abortion in particular until a quarter the way through the verse. nicely written throughout, lots of slick enjoyable one liners. the salad and noodles line was worded nicely. 'detach the silver cord' was turbo, a very nice concept in general.
both were very consistent, two awesome verses. i feel law had more high points and a better angle at the topic.
+1 Law
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