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Old 10-30-2015, 09:41 AM   #8
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Why did Asylum say my name up there?

Exis, little bit scattered and all over the place. Touched on a lot of different themes but never really found a way to bring it together. At the end I was left thinking "What's coming? Who's Marlow? Is he the ruler of Barrow?". I just never really connected with any of it. Alaska is a great place for imagery and I feel you missed a trick with that too.

Copy, what a stupid and enjoyable verse haha. The age progression was dope for me. It shifted in quite a subtle way. The rhyming was really solid throughout as well, even if some of it was really slant I still felt it. Usually these "ghetto speak" verses are annoying but it worked here. Not gonna be your favourite verse of all time but worth the read.

Overall, I think one was the more fun to read so he takes it for me.

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