Eth – ayo, ill vote now. First things first: it’s okay to use more than ten syllables regularly. 17-19 is kinda pushing it but 10 average? You’re just screwing yourself over. More characters = more content. But I do like what you have here. until about mid way through I enjoy your rhymes and word choices. yet .. I’m not really sure where you went with this. You hit the intro scenery halfway decent and your tone was pretty good but now I’m just sitting here like why are heads rolling, what grotesque approach is being taken, who the fuck is playing dodgeball in the middle of all of this grotesque rolling head approach? Not much is happening here bro. no offense but you really need to develop your stories a bit more. Even as a straight topical this is kind of weak. I have no idea what was going on the entire time. I liked how you rhymed and your intro was sufficient. I feel like maybe this was a hostage situation gone bad. Not really sure. I hope to see more from you next season because I think you have potential.
Copypat – rhymes are good. Story flows smooth. Definitely know what’s going on here and there are no hiccups or questions to midpoint. I didn’t really get it until the end but I felt the progression nonetheless. I went from oh yeah I hear that was cool, yeah I kinda remember that. Yeah slutty cats are abundant lately, and I am having friends over on Halloween. Okay cool. You rhymed well and the flow was pretty good. Story development was ok. This was a good, solid, topical piece. You hit the Halloween theme well and the phrase excellent.
/v copypat – he gave a more cohesive piece. All together his execution was far superior to his opponents and this was a very easy decision for me.
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