[Pent uP]

ZD -- Man when i got to the bottom of the second paragraph and i saw your topic i thought "that is genius." What I thought was that the ending was going to be both the girls getting shot. One shot in the soul because of rejection and one shot in the soul for cheating. I guess thats my one gripe with this verse - it didnt go the way i expected; The ending was still dope. I have to give you kudos for having all the elements from a story (which is a big problem from other verses that i read) while maintaining one of the smoothest flows. Overall the highest level of mechanics with a strong story...

Vulg -- There was a dope concept burried in this somewhere. It was a cross of love and lust...i think the phrase "cerebus pigeon" best explained the whole Idea behind the verse. Multiple levels of attractions and the things that come along with them - whether they were physical or metaphysical or what have you. I thought that was the single coolest line in the whole verse - i think it spoke on way too many layers. Beside that the whole verse was pretty strong in its descriptions of characteristics and their counter-parts. I think what held this verse back the most was the fact that there was alot of 'dialect changes' it felt like that made the writing feel devoid of attachment.

Overall - This was a dope ass battle with two mechanically sound and aggressive verses. I think in the end the more effective and layered verse was ZeeDee's while vulgar had a more of single idea'd verse that evolved awesomely (thatll be a word soon)