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Old 10-29-2015, 07:55 AM   #8
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Trips – So it’s about a werewolf, u subtly portrayed a werewolf as a vampire?
This didn’t lead anywhere for me and was hard to grasp your overall concept.
There seemed more rhyming though in pieces and was structured in places, so a little improvement from last week in that sense. But your work wasn’t too inspiring this week.

J – You respected the line match, fair play for that. (I accidently didn’t a few weeks back, as my piece was all but finished at the time).
Clearly keyed and it showed, as your usual rhyming display not on display here.
Felt like you were hoping the comical twist at the end would save the day and be enough to get the W over Tipple.
Lucky for you it was.

Onwards and upwards lads!

v/ Mr J
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