[Adonis]

OB - " graveyard shifts for depression and no lessons learned," Liked the use of Graveyard imagery and metaphor...."The quest is served; the tables turned for a chance to get his life reversed." not a fan of the wording at all, there are so, so many more descriptive words you could have went with rather then "Reverse". The verse was rather "free-flowing", which I didn't mind since it was purposefully done, however this one free flow through me off..."where greed grew to resemble an ogrish ghoul with more strength than Vishnu's,The biggest fights are often fought naked and armed with tissues of healing energy."...I see the next line was a slant rhyme for the latter quoted line, but it still didn't read right as the flow was just broken in too many places. All in all, a solid verse about inner demons and the battle/struggle within. I enjoyed the verse for what it was, but I wish there was more depth or details as far as the actual "war within". I think going literal for a instance would've have made this verse all the better. I also loved most of the detail, but this... "You can forget any remedy, of course the cavern is made of ice," This seemed tossed in almost as if you running out of stuff to say, glanced at the pic again, and said, "Oh, the cave is ice like" and typed the first thing that came out. All in all a solid verse though, good read.

MW - "were", and "we're" are two different words with two very different meanings brother, if you know me I'm not a fan of simple grammatical and remedial errors such as those. Again, same thing with "well, will and we'll". All in all a good verse about human nature and the path we've gone thus far. I liked the rhymes, although wasn't a fan of this one...the backlash? we feel the wrath that the guardian brings, marooned by monsoons caused by coastal flooding/" the slant rhyme in my head just didn't work at all, the rest was rather good though. I feel like you're rapper first, topicalist second which I am as well, and have been changing that as of late. But I appreciate you incorporating a hip-hop tone in each and every verse it seems like.


vote- Man oh man, IMO this was as close as it gets. Neither verse truly "wow'd"" me, but neither was awful, both were right in the middle; each missing that extra aspect or view while also making a few simple errors each. In the end, I'm voting OB, I think you both a good job, but even though I liked Mike's flow, the errors ARE really a eye sore for me and throw me off each read, each time. I also feel like if you went just a few more bars in depth about the "backlash" of the human nature that would have given you a sharper edge. Good battle boys, very close though, extremely close.