JESODIST - From start to finish this is nice with it, some of your concepts & imagery is raw...word usage is tight...good shit man.
My Cranium is harder than Uranium Walls, Jaws are Hackers like Titanium Saws,
Pack of wolves that scared to Brawl Only Gaze in Awe as i'm Feasting on Brains Raw,
A Wes Kraven Forsaken Existence getting buffer and buffer got them Scared like some Chickens,
Licking lips after Each meal getting rougher , See me and escape just to appear Quaking and Stricken,
Vividlly Swift, A close encounter leaves you looking like being thrown on top of Blades Gyrating and Spinning,
Butchering Massive Bulls including stupid mastives too for exposing their Mean Bark,
My claws are sharper than Jagged Cleats to Slaughter and Chop Meat,
Across Creeks Roaming on the outlandish unexplored mountains Tracks and Fields...
^^Fire.
timeless - Pretty short verse, I liked it though...had a good vibe to it whilst readin' it, thought the first have was nice, rest was solid...would of loved if this was longer though, felt like it endly abruptly...I wanted more dammit! Lol.
I first met my nemesis at an assemblage of the class.
Task : remembrance of the past, collect the evidence.
Bred for severance, unruly with the fluorescence of an axe.
There's a message on the map that outlines debt for veterans.
Medicine? Check. Unless you left your mind at home,
Then you're better off dead, lost to what you find. Unknown.
^^Chea.
My vote is for JESODIST...just had a stronger verse.
Stay upwards.
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