The theme this week was a Ghazal format, thus one writer wrote in the format, another didn't, thus he gets the vote.
Vulgar piece was creative, and had its highlights, some lines read very stanch, an obstruction that arose due to being wounded in the sense of rhythm and the turn of phrase was sometimes too sudden without any prize after the shift. In other words, the altercations shifted sometimes too violently, some lines were pretty in the poetic sense, I just felt some lines read unnatural. Ghazal are in a way odes, hymns, so there's a sing-song rhythm to them from my understanding.
Vote: Vulgar
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