Frank - Lol that was clever to metamorph gazelle into ghazal. Nice touch. Your wording can get a little sloppy at times. When there's less lines, take more time with it. Smoothen. It'll benefit everything if you do so. A humorous piece.
Ullr - I thought this was an orderly and neatly written take on a romantic work. The narrator's affection for the ideal woman of grace was convincing. I drew parallels to my own life and the way I've felt towards beautiful women - enraptured, a good word, and hard to suppress as a man. I thought this played it safe a bit...although well written.
My vote goes to Ullr. He took a more safe route, but it was more thorough. It had less bags around the eyes.
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