[2tripple0]

don't know mate kind of felt like a childs play kind of spin on a verse but it was just really simple and vague when it came to the story I mean was anna the doll that your daughter used to play with and it ended up killing everybody in the story don't know mate it was confusing at points and I think you could have done better with the story if you used different types of rhyme schemes and I think you suffered a bunch from using simple rhymes and it just didn't help the story none....... anyways just my opinion of what I thought of your flow....... no bullshit you could do better and just need to practice and keep reading other people pieces and shit and I think youll get the hang of it in no time....good luck with everything