Eth – the piece is produced nicely, its clear you had the idea of the finish before writing, it was basically a long set up to a punch but you pulled it off in style. Very proficient mechanics were displayed, the rhymes were solid. I really like the ending,
I like an ending that I don’t see coming and fits in perfectly to what you’re writing rather than a stupid unrelated twist you could never predict. Good job!
Complex – same again tbh, I preferred your structure in the sense that your (for the most part) sentence’s weren’t as dragged out. Nice and condensed for what was the longer piece, it reads (and looks) smoother.
Technically proficient. The story itself was good nothing special but I was expecting a dramatic ending the way it read. I dunno if I needed more or wanted more from it
I liked the match up and enjoyed the reading and analysing. No BS it was seriously close, evenly matched technically and for me it only came down to the ending.
I was more satisfied with Eth’s finish, a flat out ending which caught me out in a good way. I dunno if I felt like I wanted more or needed from complexes finish
Good job netcees!
v/Eth
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