Eth - I'll be honest with you have computer problems and tossing up a verse to get it in, in time. I wasn't sure how well it was going to be. But that was very well written and a great unique, original piece. I really enjoyed it. Great wording, rhyme scheme, flow, use of vocab. The description and emotion behind it was very well done. Then the twist at the end that we are all his creations starts to pull over why we 'war and corrupt', the depressions, the misery. It really summed it all up. I can't find anything to say to even critique that drop, even the length as short verse as that is fit it perfect. Can't ask for anything better, imo.
Godcomplex - Cool little story. I like the more of a single artist approach showing the world the real demise of happiness. You can see his pain and misery in the art. Using the van gogh reference to justify what the artist was doing was a nice touch as well. The description and imagery was also used well in your piece as it was eth's. Flow wise in the first part it was off in some bars, the second part you wrote was smooth straight through. I thought a couple times you sacrificed the way the bars read for vocabulary, but for the most part you used what was good for the context and content. Just to give you an example so you know where I'm coming from the 'posthumously', bar would have been much smoother with some simpler like just after death for example. Another solid, enjoyable drop though.
MVGT: Eth - This battle was well worth the championship match, I must say. I enjoyed both takes on the topic. Eth gets my vote for the simple fact I just thought his verse was flawless, I didn't see any mistakes in his writing and he did a great job taking his approach on the topic and turning it into a great piece.
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