I can't fully connect your verse to the topic honestly, other then you loosely mentioning a closet full of secrets. This was a decent read though. You toyed with gruesome thoughts but never truly dug into that dark side, I wish you had. So I enjoyed the read, but not the execution for the two reasons mentioned above.
So, after I read it a couple times and deciphered all of the errors, not good, I enjoyed the read. You gave me strong images of the ocean as a women, a gorgeous women. Overall a really good read aside from the numerous errors.
tough vote, while I liked the writing and connection to topic more from Inno, he had so many errors that I had to sift through and correct for myself in order to fully understand. So, I think Inno had the better verse but....
V/Spoken purely off of comprehnsion
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