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Old 10-17-2015, 01:20 PM   #4
Razah
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Originally Posted by 2tripple0 View Post
lol im just finished with this whole winning/losing thing...... I think i'd rather just drop in cyphers or places where it doesn't matter who is better than the other........or just voting in general I mean I haven't picked up one vote whatsoever in this league besides like one week where frank voted for me but probably because he felt bad for me.......so yeah im finished with competitive writing for a while at least
I noticed a lot of your verses are kind of long.

My thing with that is, it feels like you having a hard time putting together a whole concept & staying within that concept. So, how about you try writing a short verse, and mastering being on topic?

One step at a time. That's what I did years ago. One verse I would try to write to that idea. Another verse I'd work on the flow of it.
Another would be the rhyme schemes, being descriptive/imagery, etc...
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