[UnbornBuddha]

Lol, at Adonis telling me I didn't have to vote and keeps @ me.
Anyways, I don't really like voting for matches in which I get to face one of the competitors in the next round, but will do so, seeing the sad states of affairs, in terms of voting.

Nigma tale rooted itself and depended a lot on the reader becoming empathetic, mostly because his verse has this sense of desperation. Which, he seemed to be aiming for, so as to convey the depths of this character's misery. And I thought the beginning did this very well and I became engrossed, but then I think the story grew somewhat stale with no developments in terms of plot and philosophical inquiry. Albeit, there was new wonderings the characters pondered, it was all too up in the air, and didn't have the necessary attributes to ground it with something tangible, plus some of the wording was kind of hard to follow for me this time. I really really liked the hemoglobin line though.

ETH: I enjoyed this, did think some of the first stanza was rushed, especially the last segment, in terms of plot, it doesn't seem you rushed writing it, but in terms of how you transition from it being the greatest day of the narrator and then the transition to the machine combusting was done awkwardly. I liked the chorus repetition you had going on though, and I thought this was a smoother read than Nigma's, this time around. The best part was the last part of the second stanza, exceptionally well done. Iy got me wondering what it must feel to be sucked into a black hole, particularly one you created or brought here, it must feel ecstatic, don't you think? Anyways, I think you bested Nigma here with a more gripping tale, and although his was more humanistic, I think your work encompassed a greater scope.

Thank you both.

Vote: ET (the extraterrestrial)